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PAGE 1 (full "splash" page)
TITLE: TO THE GRINDSTONE
(GUY standing at bus stop, maybe leaning on the sign, reading a magazine folded back on itself in one hand while holding his briefcase in the other; he's an ordinary middle aged man in a suit, very bland and regular in a slightly too old-fashioned way. The other people at the bus stop pay no attention to him and seem to give him a bit of a wide berth...nothing blatant or obvious, it just seems like they give him space despite the bus stop being otherwise fairly crowded)
GUY: (caption) Another day, another dollar...another day at the ol' rat races.
GUY: (caption) Bus to work, put the time on the clock, bus it home again...same old same old.
GUY: (caption) Still, it pays the bills and keeps a roof over my head. Last thing I want is to be homeless in THIS economy, especially seeing some of the freaks wandering around.

PAGE 2:
PANEL 1: (sidelong medium shot: GUY looks up from his magazine as bus pulls up)
GUY: (caption) I don't want to have to be out among those weirdos.
PANEL 2: (back, possibly side shot: GUY reacts as if he was shoved aside by crowd climbing onto bus, VERY IMPORTANT that no one actually makes any physical or eye contact with him, in fact no one seems to actually notice he was even standing there as they climb aboard. GUY looks indignant, but resigned...this always happens to him, so getting upset won't change anything)
GUY: (caption) Case in point...GEEZ, you'd think I was invisible or something, I swear.
PANEL 3: (Interior, bus: GUY finally gets onto bus as doors close behind him; he holds up a bus pass for the driver who doesn't even look at it, but GUY doesn't notice as he's already looking for a seat)
GUY: (caption) Same as always, the driver doesn't even notice my pass is expired. Hell, it expired years ago and I still haven't needed to replace it.
GUY: (caption) I'd almost feel guilty, if it wasn't THEIR fault for not even bothering to look at it.
GUY: (caption) Job competence? What was that again?
PANEL 4: (Longish shot of bus interior, it's obviously crowded as GUY scans around for a seat; he doesn't look happy about what he sees)
GUY: (caption) I try to stay as far away from the oddballs as I can, but some days it can't be helped...

PAGE 3:
PANEL 1: (Interior of the bus, still crowded except for one seat on one bench, possibly one of those sideways benches for clarity's sake; other seat has ECTOGIRL sitting in it, looking every bit as out of place as a teenage girl in a frightwig, tights, and skull facepaint would in this situation, but she's sitting upright and attentive, possibly with her hands folded in her lap, and is smiling brightly at GUY)
GUY: (caption) ...like today it seems.
GUY: (caption) Looks like the circus is in town again...is this kid even for real?
PANEL 2: (Medium shot, bench is square in the middle; ECTOGIRL watches as GUY, pretending not to notice her, sits down beside her)
GUY: (caption) Maybe, if I'm lucky, she's a quiet freak of nature instead of one of the talky types.
PANEL 3: (Exact same shot as before, with GUY sitting and trying to read his magazine while ECTOGIRL, still smiling, either stares at him or looks around the bus at the other passengers...whichever you think seems funnier/cuter)
PANEL 4: (Exact same shot as the last two, with ECTOGIRL turned (back?) towards GUY, smiling brightly as she speaks while he visibly winces, obviously upset at this as he slightly crumples the magazine he was reading)
ECTOGIRL: Hullo!
GUY: (caption) GODAMMIT!

PAGE 4:
PANEL 1: (shot over ECTOGIRL's shoulder, her back to us, as GUY talks with restrained anger at her, barely having looked up from his magazine)
GUY: Listen, miss, I am JUST going to work and I do NOT want to be bothered right now.
PANEL 2: (Possibly same kind of shot as PANEL 3 on the previous page, with ECTOGIRL either staring at GUY who is politely fuming at her, or her looking around the bus again, smiling)
PANEL 3: (Same shot as last panel as GUY starts to go back to his magazine, seemingly convinced this strange girl will now leave him alone)
PANEL 4: (Almost identical to PANEL 4 on previous page, as a smiling ECTOGIRL talks to an angry, wincing GUY again)
ECTOGIRL: ...y'know what's kinda fu-funny about a city this b-big? There's SO many PEOPLE in it.
GUY: (caption) ARGH!

PAGE 5:
PANEL 1: (ECTOGIRL goes on talking as if to herself, blissfully unaware of GUY's angry attempts to ignore her)
ECTOGIRL: All those people...all those minds an-and souls...it creates a LOT of psychic static someti-times.
ECTOGIRL: An-And sometimes that static just sorta...holds onto stuff it shouldn't.
ECTOGIRL: Like a fishing ne-net.
PANEL 2: (ECTOGIRL is looking at GUY again as she talks, like she's waiting for him to "get" what she's saying; he still ignores her, a little angrier than last panel)
ECTOGIRL: Funny thing about-out nets, too...sometimes, things get caught in them and don't kno-know they're caught.
ECTOGIRL: Not until something comes and pu-pulls them out of the net, anyway.
PANEL 3: (ECTOGIRL is still talking, now seeming to be lost in her own conclusions, as GUY loses it beside her)
ECTOGIRL: ...and then, sometimes, things get cau-caught in the net so lo-long that they get all twisty and grody and angry and start going after other stuff in the net...but that's PROBAB-ABLY more like an aquarium, actually, not a really a ne-net...maybe I need another simile...
GUY: WILL YOU JUST SHUT UP?!
PANEL 4: (GUY has had enough and is standing up and full-on yelling at ECTOGIRL, who seems totally unaffected by it)
GUY: I AM JUST TRYING TO HAVE A NICE, QUIET RIDE TO WORK AND NOT HAVE SOME STUTTERING, FACEPAINTED FREAK WHO'S SEEN TOO MANY HORROR MOVIES TELL ME ABOUT HER PSYCHIC FRIEND NETWORK, OKAY?!

PAGE 6:
PANEL 1: (ECTOGIRL is looking at GUY, a mix of pity and mild amusement on her face)
ECTOGIRL: ...you REALLY don't know, do you?
GUY: KNOW WHAT? THAT YOU'RE AN ANNOYING LUNATIC?
PANEL 2: (ECTOGIRL gestures to the rest of the bus as GUY still fumes)
ECTOGIRL: That nobody else on this bus can he-hear you.
ECTOGIRL: Or see you.
PANEL 3: (Similar shot as last panel, only the "camera" is pulling back as GUY starts to notice the other passengers, who are blurred to us, again)
PANEL 4: (Longer shot, continuous with previous panel, as GUY realizes at the same time as the reader does that nobody on the bus is paying any attention to him, his tantrum, or ECTOGIRL)
GUY: ...wh...what..?

PAGE 7:
PANEL 1: (GUY sorta slumps back into his seat, still not entirely comprehending or believing what he's thinking, as ECTOGIRL smiles with concern on her face)
ECTOGIRL: So...can you tell me what year do you thi-think it is..?
GUY: It's...1993. Everyone...knows that...
ECTOGIRL: Uh-huh...
PANEL 2: (ECTOGIRL points at the Kindle/iPad/whatever of another passenger who has her earphones plugged into it as GUY cranes his neck to get a better look at it)
ECTOGIRL: ...and what is that girl listening to?
GUY: Her...Walkman..?
PANEL 3: (ECTOGIRL looks legitimately sad for GUY, but still keeps a smile on her face for his sake as she takes his hands in hers; GUY looks like he just realized he's been eating dog shit and thought it was caviar)
GUY: ...but...I don't...I'm...going to work...
ECTOGIRL: You've been here a re-really long time, haven't you?
ECTOGIRL: Most of th-the locals know about the bench on this bu-bus, and how you never sit in that seat you're in or it fe-feels like someone is pushing you off of it...you're kind of an urba-ban legend, you know that?
ECTOGIRL: That's how I found out about you. And I thought I cou-could help.
ECTOGIRL: I'm a psychopomp...I help both the living and the de-...um...
GUY: ...I'm...dead..?
PANEL 4: (GUY is clutching his head, pulling away from ECTOGIRL as if he's trying to deny everything)
GUY: NO! NONONONO-NO! I CAN'T BE DEAD! i HAVE AN APARTMENT AND A JOB AND A DATE WITH JENNIFER FROM ACCOUNTING ON SATURDAY AND I CAN'T BE DEAD ICAN'T BE DEAD I CAN'T B-
PANEL 5: (Similar to previous panel, only GUY has his eyes open and his mouth shut and looks frightened at something off-panel; if ECTOGIRL is visible, she's reacting to whatever he is, too, and she is even MORE worried than GUY is)
SOMETHING (SFX): GRRREAAARRRRRGGGHHHHHH!
ECTOGIRL: ...no...nononono, not now...

PAGE 8 (full "splash" page):
(SOMETHING is on the bus, stalking towards ECTOGIRL and GUY through the un-reacting passengers; it's obviously unnatural, but humanoid-ish; there's screaming, distorted faces...some human, some no longer...emerging from its skin in places, just have fun with this thing; you can decide how many arms it has, but at least one of them is reaching for the two of them as ECTOGIRL is on her feet, possibly floating, and is pulling GUY to his)
SOMETHING: SCREAARRRRRGHHHHHH..!
ECTOGIRL: C'MON, MOVE IT!

PAGE 9:
PANEL 1: (ECTOGIRL has leapt/is leaping through the side/rear of the bus and is dragging a terrified GUY by his arm along with her)
ECTOGIRL: Our sto-stop! Everybody off!
PANEL 2: (
Here's a twist: an actual albeit unfinished script for my seemingly forgotten superheroine, Ectogirl.

See,  a few years ago a young artist I'd occasionally hang out with online was looking to expand from pinup work into actual sequential comic art and asked me to write a script he could draw, no other criteria mentioned since he didn't want to impose further. So, I wrote up this, a sort of short intro story for Ectogirl with her doing her occasional job of amateur psychopomp, investigating supernatural disturbances and doing what she could to resolve it.

I got about 2/3 into it when I showed him what I had so he'd know what my scripting style was...his reaction to it was best described as "senile father shows son an ashtray he'd lovingly sculpted out of human feces": he blandly commented it was "interesting" then changed the subject and never brought it up again. Seems he was expecting something less "Vertigo-inspired superhero drama" and more "graphic K-Girl porn," something I probably should have inferred from WHERE his fandom of me originated. Maybe I did and I was just being contrary, I don't know...seeing as no one was interested in anything I did that wasn't K-Girl- or pornography-based, preferably both, I didn't bother finishing it and, in fact, didn't write anything again until the "Wardoll" and "Young Legends" stuff this year.

Still, I think it's not a bad little scenario, and since I seem to be leaning towards resurrecting my superhero OCs, I might finish this off and see if I can actually find someone to draw it...maybe take a bash at it myself, since it's supposed to be a beginner script.
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shadowblade316 Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2017
As someone that's done pics of Ectogirl, I wonder if I should be offended by that "no one was interested in anything I did that wasn't K-Girl- or pornography-based, preferably both" comment or not.  Wink/Razz 
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Heckfire Featured By Owner Edited Feb 25, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I'm 99% certain the phrase "exception that proves the rule" applies here, although I think most of you guys on Skype would probably be happy if I did ANYTHING these days...which is part of why I left until I actually HAD something to show. That, and the fact that no one was ever on when I usually was except "drunk and ready for sleep" mode Orin, and, tho' love him like a brother, that kinda sole human contact isn't really conducive to creative endeavors.
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HotRod-302 Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2017
Sorry I don't comment much, I'm not very good at it. But I am glad to see you being active again!
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